写作教学案例：一篇由科幻故事改编的读后续写题：Rain-maker
张德强高中英语教学2021-08-29 17:16
写作教学案例：一篇由科幻故事改编的读后续写题：Rain-maker
【材料分析】该短文为科幻故事改编，对学生来说读懂有一定的困难，部分学生在训练时没有理解 这是一篇科幻故事，因而和下文两段首句的衔接出现问题。学生需要理解：the Moon Colony;I even miss the sound of rain on the roof;The colony was housed inside a huge transparent dome 等等信息，才能读懂故事，顺利实现上下文的衔接。
读后续写：第二节 （满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Collin was lying on his back, tossing (抛掷) a baseball toward the ceiling when his bedroom door opened. His sister, Carina, barged (乱闯) in and perched (停留) on the edge of his bed. Collin could tell she’d been crying.
“What’s wrong?” Collin asked. “Homesick again?”
Carina nodded.
“Yeah, me too.” Collin sighed.
Their family had move to the Moon Colony (殖民地) nearly four months ago. It still didn’t feel like home. The dwellings (公寓) were cozy, but outside everything was gray, rocky and lifeless.
“I miss my friends,” Carina said gloomily (满脸愁容地). “And green grass and swimming, and everything. I even miss the sound of rain on the roof.”
The colony was housed inside a huge transparent dome (圆顶). There was no weather there at all—no rain or snow or even wind.
“Worst of all,” Carina continued, “my birthday is in two days, and I don’t think Mom and Dad are planning anything special. They’re too busy.”
“She’s probably right.” thought Collin. Life on the Moon was hectic (紧张忙碌的) for scientists like their parents. He doubted they had time to plan a party. And how could they anyway? Things such as balloons and birthday candles didn’t exist on the colony. We don’t even have the rations (定量口粮) to make a cake.
“Don’t worry.” Collin put an arm around Carina’s shoulder.
Collin wandered toward the agricultural center, where his mom worked. Some days, he helped her take measurements or harvest crops. Today he found her taking notes in a patch (地块) of tall tube-like plants.
“What are those?” he asked.
“Bamboo plants,” said Mom. “They are strong and grow fast. They make good building material.”
He spotted a one-foot section of bamboo that had broken from a larger stalk. “May I have that piece?”
“Sure.” Mom handed it to him and made a note on her chart.
The next day, as his teacher supervised (监督), Collin drilled tiny holes into the piece of bamboo and inserted small nails into each hole. He poured a handful of Moon pebbles (鹅卵石) inside the tube and taped heavy-duty fabric scraps (耐用的织物碎片) over the open ends.
注意：
1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para.1: Collin held the bamboo piece carefully as he hurried home.
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Para.2: “What is it?” Carina asked, looking at it curiously.
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参考范文：第二节 （满分25分）
Collin held the bamboo piece carefully as he hurried home. He hid it behind his back and slid open the front door. To his surprise, Mom was carrying something that looked like a cake. He looked closer and realized Mom had topped a flat brown oatcake with dried apples and cinnamon sugar. A real treat, on the Moon. After the family had sung to Carina and Dad had cut the cake, Collin said, “And now I have a present for you.” He handed his sister the bamboo rod, “Happy birthday!”
“What is it?” Carina asked, looking at it curiously. “A rain stick,” said Collin. “Whenever you turn it over, the Moon pebbles fall around the nails and it sounds like rain.” Carina turned the stick, and the room was filled with a sound like rain drumming on a roof. “It’s Moon rain!” she said. “It makes me feel like I’m home.” She smiled at Collin and turned the rain stick over again.
学生考场作文选：
【材料分析】该短文为科幻故事改编，对学生来说读懂有一定的困难，部分学生在训练时没有理解 这是一篇科幻故事，因而和下文两段首句的衔接出现问题。学生需要理解：the Moon Colony;I even miss the sound of rain on the roof;The colony was housed inside a huge transparent dome 等等信息，才能读懂故事，顺利实现上下文的衔接。
读后续写：第二节 （满分25分）
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Collin was lying on his back, tossing (抛掷) a baseball toward the ceiling when his bedroom door opened. His sister, Carina, barged (乱闯) in and perched (停留) on the edge of his bed. Collin could tell she’d been crying.
“What’s wrong?” Collin asked. “Homesick again?”
Carina nodded.
“Yeah, me too.” Collin sighed.
Their family had move to the Moon Colony (殖民地) nearly four months ago. It still didn’t feel like home. The dwellings (公寓) were cozy, but outside everything was gray, rocky and lifeless.
“I miss my friends,” Carina said gloomily (满脸愁容地). “And green grass and swimming, and everything. I even miss the sound of rain on the roof.”
The colony was housed inside a huge transparent dome (圆顶). There was no weather there at all—no rain or snow or even wind.
“Worst of all,” Carina continued, “my birthday is in two days, and I don’t think Mom and Dad are planning anything special. They’re too busy.”
“She’s probably right.” thought Collin. Life on the Moon was hectic (紧张忙碌的) for scientists like their parents. He doubted they had time to plan a party. And how could they anyway? Things such as balloons and birthday candles didn’t exist on the colony. We don’t even have the rations (定量口粮) to make a cake.
“Don’t worry.” Collin put an arm around Carina’s shoulder.
Collin wandered toward the agricultural center, where his mom worked. Some days, he helped her take measurements or harvest crops. Today he found her taking notes in a patch (地块) of tall tube-like plants.
“What are those?” he asked.
“Bamboo plants,” said Mom. “They are strong and grow fast. They make good building material.”
He spotted a one-foot section of bamboo that had broken from a larger stalk. “May I have that piece?”
“Sure.” Mom handed it to him and made a note on her chart.
The next day, as his teacher supervised (监督), Collin drilled tiny holes into the piece of bamboo and inserted small nails into each hole. He poured a handful of Moon pebbles (鹅卵石) inside the tube and taped heavy-duty fabric scraps (耐用的织物碎片) over the open ends.
注意：
1．续写词数应为150左右；
2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
Para.1: Collin held the bamboo piece carefully as he hurried home.
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Para.2: “What is it?” Carina asked, looking at it curiously.
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参考范文：第二节 （满分25分）
Collin held the bamboo piece carefully as he hurried home. He hid it behind his back and slid open the front door. To his surprise, Mom was carrying something that looked like a cake. He looked closer and realized Mom had topped a flat brown oatcake with dried apples and cinnamon sugar. A real treat, on the Moon. After the family had sung to Carina and Dad had cut the cake, Collin said, “And now I have a present for you.” He handed his sister the bamboo rod, “Happy birthday!”
“What is it?” Carina asked, looking at it curiously. “A rain stick,” said Collin. “Whenever you turn it over, the Moon pebbles fall around the nails and it sounds like rain.” Carina turned the stick, and the room was filled with a sound like rain drumming on a roof. “It’s Moon rain!” she said. “It makes me feel like I’m home.” She smiled at Collin and turned the rain stick over again.
学生考场作文选：